Ian, you certainly have a lot of narrative ambiguity going on here. While the figures in the cages suggest distress, we have no idea who put them there or why they did it. But the strongest two elements for me are the shapes in lower right and lower left. I can easily wonder what those are for a long time (video cameras? something more ominous?). While I think the composition is strong, I think you could get rid of some elements to make the whole thing even more mysterious. What if, for example, you removed the top and bottom bars from all three cages, so that all we'd see would be the figures behind bars? I think the viewer would make the correct inference, and you'd have one more element of visual and narrative strangeness. And I do think the piece works best in black and white (although I might change my mind if I knew what you were thinking with this).
I like the unnatural shapes in this, it's very anxious. I like how you don't have any indicators of the space besides the things in it, it adds to the tension, but I think the cages and people being more aligned with an imaginary perspective would have given it some weight. I'd be interested how this would change in different colors.
This is very cool, Ian. I think for your composition, adding some indication of a ground would help me put the scene in context. It kinda looks to me like the figures are floating. -Kaayla
Ian, you certainly have a lot of narrative ambiguity going on here. While the figures in the cages suggest distress, we have no idea who put them there or why they did it. But the strongest two elements for me are the shapes in lower right and lower left. I can easily wonder what those are for a long time (video cameras? something more ominous?). While I think the composition is strong, I think you could get rid of some elements to make the whole thing even more mysterious. What if, for example, you removed the top and bottom bars from all three cages, so that all we'd see would be the figures behind bars? I think the viewer would make the correct inference, and you'd have one more element of visual and narrative strangeness. And I do think the piece works best in black and white (although I might change my mind if I knew what you were thinking with this).
ReplyDeleteI like the unnatural shapes in this, it's very anxious. I like how you don't have any indicators of the space besides the things in it, it adds to the tension, but I think the cages and people being more aligned with an imaginary perspective would have given it some weight. I'd be interested how this would change in different colors.
ReplyDeleteThis is very cool, Ian. I think for your composition, adding some indication of a ground would help me put the scene in context. It kinda looks to me like the figures are floating.
ReplyDelete-Kaayla