Kaayla, this was an ambitious piece, and there is much that I like about the way it turned out. I think the arrangement works well to evoke the various ways of concealing emotional distress, and the blue background seems to tie everything together well. One thing that wasn't mentioned during the critique is that the "not" the "this is not" is a little confusing. It might read as "lot," which is how I read it at first. This would be easy to correct by extending the left side of the "n" down. As far as individual panels go, my favorites are the one on the left, the one on the top, and the one on the right. These compositions are less generic than the other two, and all manage to evoke a broad range of emotions and associations. The other two feel more straightforward. I'm especially drawn to the one with the grid. This is a really original way to incorporate the text into the image; rather than being integrated into the image per se, the text is serving to break up the face in a way that feels dehumanizing, (or at least damaging in some way). I would encourage you to further pursue that idea somewhere, either in this class or beyond.
Kaayla, this was an ambitious piece, and there is much that I like about the way it turned out. I think the arrangement works well to evoke the various ways of concealing emotional distress, and the blue background seems to tie everything together well. One thing that wasn't mentioned during the critique is that the "not" the "this is not" is a little confusing. It might read as "lot," which is how I read it at first. This would be easy to correct by extending the left side of the "n" down. As far as individual panels go, my favorites are the one on the left, the one on the top, and the one on the right. These compositions are less generic than the other two, and all manage to evoke a broad range of emotions and associations. The other two feel more straightforward. I'm especially drawn to the one with the grid. This is a really original way to incorporate the text into the image; rather than being integrated into the image per se, the text is serving to break up the face in a way that feels dehumanizing, (or at least damaging in some way). I would encourage you to further pursue that idea somewhere, either in this class or beyond.
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